jo_graham ([info]jo_graham) wrote,
@ 2008-08-06 11:43:00
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A while ago a reader asked me about the scene in Black Ships when they're camped on the beach near Mt. Vesuvius and Neas has the strange vision of his future self. I also wrote that scene from the other side, from that future Neas looking back.

So here it is for you, kind of like a bonus DVD extra! :)



Marcus Gerontius Tasso was twenty-six, a soldier, a sailor, and a child of the East. His grandparents were Etrurian, certainly, under Roman rule for centuries, but his father had gone out to the East in hopes of making money, now that all those ancient lands were part of the Empire. And he had found what he sought. Importing fruit was a lucrative business. Dried dates, apricots, peaches and sesame paste were all important produce that shipped from Caesarea in Judea to the rest of the Empire.

Fruit importing was not for Marcus. He was the oldest, and his father’s heir, and so of course he was the impractical one in a practical family. Both of his younger brothers were better merchants. He was the one with wild dreams of glory, of duels with Parthian champions and night marches across the desert. He was the one who was like his mother.

Now he stood on the deck of his ship, standing out from Stabiae, watching the world explode.

The sky was on fire. Mount Vesuvius rained ash and pumice down on them, even so far away, and the morning sky was dark as twilight. Dark clouds rolled down the slopes of the mountain, swallowing greenery and vineyards, houses and livestock and people. Already he could see fires in the towns, Herculaneum swept under. He had been here on leave, two years ago with his parents when they were in Italy. He had stayed in this town, been a guest in these homes.

On the next ship he heard Admiral Plinius giving the orders. They would sail into the gates of the underworld and take off as many survivors as they could.

He gave the orders and the rowers picked up the beat, the ship going forward. Pieces of pumice floated on the surface of the sea like scraps of papyrus. Burning stones rained down. He ordered the ships boys to have buckets of water at the ready when they landed on the deck. He was doing twenty things at once, everywhere on the deck, watching the town coming nearer.

And then, for a moment, everything was still. It seemed to him that the town was gone entirely, not engulfed in fire and lava, but never built, that green lands curved around the bay, three black ships drawn up on white sand beaches. They were little ships, less than half the size of his trireme, fragile looking. People were sleeping on the beach. Except for one man. On the nearest ship a tall man was looking straight back at him, light brown hair held back with a leather thong, bare-chested and strong. His blue eyes met Marcus’ with a jolt.

Fire, and a burning city.

There were swimmers in the water.

“Careful with the lower bank!” Marcus shouted. “You there, get some ropes over. By Jupiter, this isn’t an enemy fleet action! These are our people, the ones we’ve come to rescue! Careful with the oars!”

A young man about his age was treading water, a naked baby held above his head. Marcus threw the rope himself, waited to see if he would get it. It slithered near him in the water, and he bobbed up and down, but at last got it. Marcus towed him to the side, but he couldn’t climb with the child.

“Tie the baby on!” Marcus shouted down over the din. He hauled the baby up the side, then dropped the rope back down, but the man was gone. They were drifting closer to the docks. He hoped the man had gone up some other rope, but he couldn’t wait to see.

“Get the lower bank in!” he yelled. They were going to break their oars against the stone wharf.

There was the strangest sense of unreality to it. The light in the sky, the burning world. The double image of the peaceful beach he had seen. Getting swimmers aboard from a burning city….

It seemed like days later that they put out again, racing against the black clouds that flowed down the mountain, a firestorm, a smothering blanket of ash. It was probably less than an hour.

“Row!” he yelled, “Pull for your lives!”

One of the ships was burning. Burning stones had caught her.

“Row!” Their decks were crowded with people, some of them collapsed on the deck, retching from the fumes. Fifty? A hundred? Out of how many thousand? Out of how many people he had known, how many shopkeepers from streets he had walked, girls from the taverns he had visited?

Out to sea the skies were clear and it was morning, the pall of cloud rising like a column.

It was not until they were well out to sea that he realized he was still holding the baby. Marcus looked at it dumbly.

It was a little girl five or six months old, and other than a long red burn down one arm, she seemed to be all right. Big gray eyes watched him solemnly, clutched against his left shoulder.

Well, Marcus thought, his mother would know what to do with her. He held her and went aft to set a course for Capri.

I'd love to hear what you guys think of it!


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[info]shezan
2008-08-06 03:55 pm UTC (link)
*shivershivershiver*

Terrific!

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[info]jo_graham
2008-08-14 01:07 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]shezan
2008-08-06 03:56 pm UTC (link)
... and he's on Pliny's fleet! Too cool for words!

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[info]jo_graham
2008-08-14 01:08 pm UTC (link)
Yes, in Pliny's fleet. He's been doing a lot of galleys lately, as it were....

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[info]chadouf
2008-08-06 05:46 pm UTC (link)
It's great you post it here! Thanks!

The question from the first time I read it: in Black Ships Neas sais "He was doing his duty, but all the while I thought he was looking for someone, someone he didn't see on the dock." Was it really that Marcus was looking for someone? Or was it just the vision of Neas that was hauntung Marcus, so that Neas thought Marcus has something else to think of besides the fire?

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[info]jo_graham
2008-08-14 01:11 pm UTC (link)
He was looking back at Neas. And also looking for people he knew, since he had spent time in Pompeii before. Gull's not there. In this life she's Marcus' mother, to whom the baby will be given, the little girl that she will name Isidora. But that's another story....

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[info]yasaman
2008-08-06 06:09 pm UTC (link)
Eee, he's on Pliny's fleet! The history geek in me is always pleased by that kind of accurate detail.

I really like the strange vertigo both Marcus and the reader get from knowing it from both "sides" of the vision now. The connection of "fire and a burning city" doubles the connection and the strangeness of knowing Marcus and Neas at once. But now I want to know who the baby is and what happens to her!

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[info]jo_graham
2008-08-14 01:14 pm UTC (link)
Yes, Pliny's fleet! *g*

A strange moment for both of them. As we go along in my Numinous World series, there will be more moments like that, when the connection suddenly opens between past and future. In fact, I'm working on one this morning. It's always harder to write from the past end. After all, Marcus can put Neas in context, but Neas has no context for Marcus yet, so he can't use the word "quinquireme" or anything else that helps the reader place it.

He takes the baby to his mother, who is Gull in that life. And who of course adopts her, naming her Isidora. But that's a new story!

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[info]stellar_dust
2008-08-07 03:01 am UTC (link)
Eeeee, I love special features!

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[info]jo_graham
2008-08-14 01:15 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]selki
2008-08-07 04:05 am UTC (link)
I found it a little puzzling, which means I have extra incentive to re-read Black Ships!

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[info]jo_graham
2008-08-14 01:16 pm UTC (link)
*g* Well, it's the other side of the scene when the People are camping on the beach below Mt. Vesuvius and Neas has the strange vision of his future self. This is the other side, looking back!

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[info]jordan179
2008-10-20 12:31 am UTC (link)
I like the fact that he could see Aeneas too ... it never occurred to me that the subjects of visions of that sort might be sensitive to when they were being watched. But it makes sense, from both a mystical and a scientific viewpoint.

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[info]jo_graham
2008-10-28 02:32 pm UTC (link)
I'm glad that works for you. The mirror works in both directions!

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